IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5.5

Write a letter to the transport officer about a problem at transportation system in your area please say  describe the situation you have facing.  Why do you consider it a problem? What changes would you like to recommend?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Dear sir,  My name is Nishi Prajapati from Brampton Canada. I am writing
this
Linking Words
 letter to apprise you
with
Change preposition
of
show examples
 a problem with the transport system, which is causing issues to not only the students commuting but
specially
Replace the word
especially
show examples
 the seniors as well. And I request you to look into
this
Linking Words
 matter and do something to mitigate the problem as early as possible. You know very well that
due to
Linking Words
 the construction work going
at
Change preposition
on at
show examples
 the intersection near Hyde
park
Capitalize word
Park
show examples
 and
dundas
Change the capitalization
Dundas
show examples
 road .owing to it, there is always a delay of
buses
Use synonyms
 or sometimes the
buses
Use synonyms
 have already departed before time .
Addding
Correct your spelling
Adding
 to
this
Linking Words
, people always wait for their
buses
Use synonyms
 to come on time and later they found out that
buses
Use synonyms
 will get delayed.
These
Correct pronoun usage
This
show examples
 causes
problem
Fix the agreement mistake
problems
show examples
to
Change preposition
for
show examples
 the
elder
Replace the word
elderly
show examples
 who
faces
Correct subject-verb agreement
face
show examples
 the issue
for
Change preposition
of
show examples
 standing for a long time
at
Change preposition
in
show examples
 que. on top of that,
next
Correct article usage
the next
show examples
 bus will arrive after 45
mins
Correct your spelling
minutes
show examples
 which is quite
furstating
Correct your spelling
frustrating
 for everyone standing at
bus
Add an article
the bus
a bus
show examples
 stop.
Its
Replace the word
It's
It is
show examples
 my humble request to you to look into
this
Linking Words
 matter and take it seriously. To avoid
this
Linking Words
 issue in future, you can see the timing and schedule
the
Change preposition
of the
show examples
buses
Use synonyms
 as per the demand
of
Change preposition
for
show examples
 transport on that road.
Also
Linking Words
, temporary
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
routes can be changed
due to
Linking Words
 construction. Hoping for
a
Remove the article
apply
show examples
prompt action from you regarding
this
Linking Words
 matter. Yours faithfully, Nishi Prajapati

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task achievement
Ensure clarity by clearly identifying the main problem in a specific sentence. This will help in understanding the core issue.
coherence cohesion
Organize the information to avoid repetition and maintain a smooth flow of ideas. Consider clearly separating the description of the problem and your recommendations.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and respectful, which is appropriate for addressing an official.
coherence cohesion
The letter includes a greeting and closing, providing a clear sense of beginning and end.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: