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The graph below gives information about the number of cases of diarrhea in Mashhad between 1983 and 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparation

The graph below gives information about the number of cases of diarrhea in Mashhad between 1983 and 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparation
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The line graph illustrates the sum of
diarreha
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diarrhoea
cases
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thoughout
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throughout
years
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the years
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 from 1983 to 1992 in Mashad. It showed that the trend is relatively increased until its
drop
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on
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in
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 1992. In 1983, the number of
diarreha
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diarrhoea
cases
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 stood at 100
cases
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 and
its
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it was
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 relatively constant until
its
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it
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 significantly
grow
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grew
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 in 1985. In 1986, the
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number of diareha
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diareha
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diarrhoea
cases
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are
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apply
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doubled compared to
its
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 number in 1985 and slightly
climb
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 from 190
cases
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 to 200
cases
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 in 1987 and
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drop
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dropped
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 more than half in 1988. In 1989
there's
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there was
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 rapid
grow
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growth
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 of
diareha
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diarrhoea
cases
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it
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which
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jump
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jumped
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 more than 4 times compared to
in
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apply
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1988.
Then
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its
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it
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 showed
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a gradually
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gradually
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gradual
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drop
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 in 1989 until
its
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it
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 sharply
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drop
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dropped
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until
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to
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 0
case
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cases
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on
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in
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 1992.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words cases, drop with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 4 times.
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