The charts below give information on the location and the types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The charts below give information on the location and the types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
The
given
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pie
chart
provides information about the location of
dance
classes
of young people, and the horizontal bar
chart
illustrates information about the types of
dance
classes
of young people at present in a town in Australia.
Overall
, the majority of
dance
classes
are situated in private studios, and the majority of
students
are attending Ballet and Modern
dance
classes
.
According to
the pie
chart
, 48% of
dance
classes
are situated in private studios. Meanwhile, 24% of
dance
classes
are
after school
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classes
, and they are situated in school halls. 18% of
classes
are situated in community halls and other areas.
Moreover
, there are 10% of
dance
classes
, which are situated in collage-based studios.
According to
the horizontal bar
chart
, 600
students
, who are under 11 and only 300
students
who are 11 to 16 years old attend Ballet
dance
classes
.
Moreover
, around 450
students
age
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under 11, and 430
students
at
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apply
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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age
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aged
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of
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apply
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11 to 16 attend Tap
dance
classes
. Meanwhile, only 300
students
age
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aged
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under 11 attend Modern
dance
classes
, and around 520
students
age
Wrong verb form
aged
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of
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apply
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11 to 16 attend modern
classes
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, moreover".
Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, dance, classes, students, age with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • attending
  • currently
  • location
  • variety
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • jazz
  • venues
  • popularity
  • attendees
  • juxtaposing
  • correlating
  • proximity
  • cultural influences
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • monopoly
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • enrollment
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