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The table below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in 5 European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in 5 European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given two tables provide information about the sales of Fairtrade-levelled
coffee
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 and bananas in two different years, 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
Overall
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, it is clear from the two tables that the
sale
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 of
coffee
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 and bananas increased in all European countries,
however
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, only in Sweden and Denmark,
the
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did the
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sale
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 of
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banana
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bananas
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decreased
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decrease
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.
According to
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 the first table, in the UK, in 1999,
coffee
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sale
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sales
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 earned 1.5
million
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euro
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euros
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. In the year 2004, the
sale
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 of
coffee
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 experienced a dramatic increase and earned 20
million
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euro
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euros
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.
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, Denmark, in 1999, made
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profit
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a profit
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 of 1.8
million
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euro
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 by selling
coffee
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, and in 2004, it slightly increased and only had
the
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a
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profit
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 of 2
million
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.
According to
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second
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 table, in Switzerland, in 1999,
banana
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sale
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sales
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 made
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profit
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a profit
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 of 15
million
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euro
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euros
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, and in the year 2004,
banana
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sale
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sales
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was
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apply
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dramatically increased and
got
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made
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 a
profit
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 of 47
million
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euro
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euros
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.
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, In
belgium
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, only 0.6
million
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profit
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 was made by selling
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banana
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bananas
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, and it slightly increased in the year 2004, which was 4
million
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euro
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. In Sweden, the
sale
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 of
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banana
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bananas
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 declined and in 1999, the
profit
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 was 1.8
million
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euro
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euros
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, and in 2004, it was 1
million
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euro
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euros
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.
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, in Denmark, in 1999, 2
million
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euro
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euros
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of banana
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banana
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bananas
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 were sold, and in 2004, 0.9
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euro
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euros bananas
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banana
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 were sold.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "according to, moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, sale, banana, million, euro, profit with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sales figures
  • Fairtrade-labelled
  • substantial rise
  • stable sales
  • modest increase
  • significant increase
  • decline in sales
  • trends
  • comparisons
  • features
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