In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food or use animal products for instance, clothing and medicines. to what exten do you agree or disagree.
People have different views about how the way to
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proced
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proved
products
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garment
industry like clothing and medicine Correct article usage
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lead
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advances
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in
technological
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human
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humans
products
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products
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from
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by
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fur
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to create gear and clothing.
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animal
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animals
as
abuse, which Change preposition
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leading
to Change the form of the verb
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animals
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animals
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objects
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are
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the first
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.
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the use
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of animals
animals
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fulfill
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fulfil
products
without killing Use synonyms
animals
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such
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materials
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This
new invention leading to prevent the Linking Words
extiction
of specific species to keep a balance in our ecosystem.Correct your spelling
extinction
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