The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph depicts the total number of opening and closing stores between 2011 and 2018 in a certain country.
Overall
, both conditions of the stores represented some volatility.
While
the rate of shops
closed
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dropped steeply in 2015, new outlet openings experienced a similar trend in 2012. In 2011, there were many shops starting their business approximately 8,500 places compared to about 6,000 shops that closed.
However
,
this
number fell just over half after a year, with only 4,000 business places being started.
On the other hand
, from 2011 to 2014, the figure for business closures fluctuated slightly before
significant
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decline to 800 stalls in 2015
,
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and
then
rebounding
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substantially to 5,000 stalls in 2016. Even though outlet openings soared again in 2013 and
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six thousand places in 2014, they fell for the second time by 2,000 in the following year. In the
last
period, it exhibited the lowest figure at 3,000 after remaining stable for three years.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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