the graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information and make comparison
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The line graph illustrates the number of people
participated
in 5 different activities at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia from 2000 to 2020.
Correct pronoun usage
who participated
Overall
, participants
tend to increase in most of the activities except for Amateur dramatics, which saw a downward in 2005 and onward. Film
club
being
the highest category of all Wrong verb form
was
while
the other four were approximately 2 times lower.
In 2000, both film
club
and martial arts had it
Correct pronoun usage
its
participants
slightly decreased to 2005 when the individuals took
part in martial arts grew, it took another five years for ones in Correct pronoun usage
who took
film
club
to rose
back again. Wrong verb form
rise
While
the number in
Change preposition
of
film
club
continued to Fix the agreement mistake
clubs
grew
onward, martial arts experienced Change the verb
grow
a
Correct article usage
apply
gradually
growth Change the adverb
gradual
as well as
a slightly
fluctuation.
Starting at 0 Change the adverb
slight
participants
in 2000, the situation in musical performances remained unchanged for the next five years, on the other hand
, either table tennis or amateur dramatics had their participants
increased and were expected to be equal in 2010 before they diverge
completely for the next 10 years. The former boosted and stood right after Wrong verb form
diverged
Film
club
as the latter dropped dramatically and placed at the bottom of the list. Meanwhile, from 2005 onward the Capitalize word
Club
participants
in musical performances grew rapidly and surpassed amateur dramatics at the number of 15 in 2015.Submitted by nphminh0207 on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words participants, film, club with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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