People say that it is a waste of time foe high school students to learn literature such as novels and poems.

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novels and poems ,
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of time mainly
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it could be a time-squander for
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such
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as novels and poems because it could benefit
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future life. First and foremost,
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related to politics ,
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help to improve their
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knowledge about
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traditions , cultural heritage or general understanding
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life.
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curriculum that
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something about life but
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relationships with people from overseas since when someone
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to explore
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or meet new people ,
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literature
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communicate or give assistance to find a way. In my view ,
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a waste of time mainly highly recognized
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because many
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do not prefer
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like literacy texts or creative writing. So they should direct to
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based works for improving healthy lifestyle ,
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, if teachers instruct the
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to learn about history or fulfil the physical activities could more efficient and adaptable for both of them. In conclusion,
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can be of some value for
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to develop cultural familiarity.
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, I am of the opinion that most high
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be interested in
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so they should devote their own
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as well as
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should not be overlooked.
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