You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? You should write at least 250 words.
To be certain, many
people
in communities use social media
rather than see them in real life, throughout it has many positive and negative ways, in the positive way
social media
like Telegram or YouTube help people
to study, also
it's a safe time
.However
, negative feedback it's will be a risk for the eyes even if physical or on the internet.
By contrast
, in using social media
in a positive way
there is
a lot of points but will discuss two points, Correct subject-verb agreement
are
first,
a safe time
many employees or even students are busy with their families or in another region they can not talk with them because they don't have time
to go their country to speak to them face to face so they are safe their time
and communicated in social media
such
as face time
. However
about studying, many Add a comma
However,
people
study on social media
like watching videos about subjects they don't understand because they don't get it from their teacher or even they abcesnt
so it is easy for them to watch YouTube and Telegram Correct your spelling
absent
it
is the same benefit.
Correct pronoun usage
apply
On the other hand
, the disadvantages of risk in the eyes a
lot of Add a missing verb
are a
people
become lazy
to go to their families Rephrase
too lazy
as a result
they contact with them on mobile so they will be damaged
their eyes and their physical body Wrong verb form
damage
such
as their neck will be hurt b, Reagrding to that also
sometimes the internet not amazing so the student can not study their subject, on other hand workers even them they can not call their families due to
internet.
In conclusion, my opinion on that topic to certain with
Change preposition
apply
it
because as we discussed it has many issues in negative Correct pronoun usage
apply
way
like physical risks also
the
positive Correct article usage
apply
way
fantastic to speak with others on social Fix the agreement mistake
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media
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Clarify your arguments by being more specific in your points and examples.
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