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Some scientists believe intelligent life forms may exist in other planets and some want to send messages to the space to contact with these life forms. But other scientists believe it is a bad idea and it could be dangerous discuss both ideas and give your own opinion.

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Since ancient times, humans have been fascinated with
univers
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universes
,
specially
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 the possibility of life
in
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on
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 other planets. Some scientists think
that
is
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it
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 is
worthwhiel
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worthwhile
 to research
on
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discovering intelligent creatures in other locations of space, and
consequently
 sending
massages
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messages
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 to them. But other academic people offer a counter
arguement
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argument
. I am in agreement with the first group of scientists. On the one hand, should
the
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scientists be successful in making constructive connections with strangers, researchers may utilize their superior knowledge in order to solve humans' hardships. As in a science-fiction movie, Artificial
intelligance
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intelligence
, UFOs are depicted with striking
intelligance
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intelligence
, and by
employeeing
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employing
 their
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 technologies, a humanoid's dead mother
were
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 revived, and he could visit his mother once again.
Thus
, they might
assisst
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assist
 us in tackling complex obstacles.
However
, connecting with some creatures that we do not know about them
caries
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carries
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 a
significan
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significant
 risk. Suppose that
in
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on
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 that planet, the life conditions are completely different than
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on earth
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earth
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Earth
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.
Then
 it is possible that some
micro organisms
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microorganisms
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of
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 that planet would be very deadly and
contageous
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contagious
 for humanity. Again in another movie,
Arival
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Arrival
, UFOs have come
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to
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 earth, and they are very friendly with humans,
whereas
their
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they
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 have carried a fatal microbe threatening our
existance
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existence
.
Therefore
, it would be a great doubt to approach
to
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this
 topic.
Overall
, I think that it is a novel idea to work on discovering life in
the
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space, for we can use their
intelligance
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intelligence
 for our betterness.
Although
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, having a connection with strangers has its own risks.
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Expand on supporting examples for each argument to strengthen your essay.
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Use a wider range of linking words and phrases to enhance the flow of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Consider refining the organization of your paragraphs to more logically present your main points.
coherence cohesion
The introduction clearly presents the topic and your opinion.
task achievement
The essay addresses both sides of the argument, fulfilling the task requirements.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion effectively summarizes your viewpoint and key points.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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