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->Topic: Some people believe that handwriting is no longer useful in the modern world and should not be taught in schools. To what extend do you agree or disagree ?

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In the
last
 decade, people stopped using handwriting in their lives. Some of them believe it should not be taught in educational places and is no longer useful in the world today. In
this
 essay I will look through both sides of
this
 argument, pus show my disagreement
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 the statements. On the one hand, handwriting is a useful piece of tool when it comes to business communication. In the business world most especially in marketing most
companies
 from abroad tend to share amongst each other formal letters. These kinds of formal letters
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helps
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 to promote the
companies
' products and
this
 leads to a better income gain for them.
For
instance
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 most
companies
 hire workers who have
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rich writing
skill
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 in Turkiye and for
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 it boosts the large cooperation
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.
Consequently
, handwriting plays a vital role in many areas.
On the other hand
, tutoring pupils' handwriting, could help them improve in different areas. First and foremost, learning how to write would hasten
up
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a student's learning process.
For example
, when they need to understand a topic clearly, by writing, they are able to memorize the topic swiftly.
Additionally
 another significant point about
this
, teaching pupils handwriting could
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great way of building different hobbies.
Therefore
, some of them could be writing a diary which could be a good way to improve the psychology of a child. Despite
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the statements mentioned above, it would
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 an agreement, for some people. the rising growth of technology and
also
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 consideration the development of generative AI, it became useless to learn handwriting in the modern world. In recent days, employees
generate
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 more than 100 letters for different
companies
 which reduces workload. Even though the advantages of learning handwriting are more, but
also
, technology has
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 it easier. In conclusion, it is important to learn how to write
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younger stage. In my opinion, I prefer using handwriting rather than digital writing.
Submitted by Bartu on

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task response
Try to develop each main point with a little more detail and support, including more examples if possible.
coherence cohesion
Improve logical transitions between ideas to enhance the flow of your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main point that contributes to your overall argument.
task response
You make use of relevant examples to support your points, such as the use of formal letters in business.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, successfully framing the discussion.
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You address multiple perspectives on the issue, showing an understanding of the complexity of the topic.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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