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Some people belive that handwritting is no longer useful in modern world and should not be taught in the schools. To what extend do you agree or disagree ?

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In the
last
 decade,
people
 stopped to use handwriting in their life. So they came up with the question, which is should we still teach handwriting to our
childeren
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children
? Obviously, there are some
people
 that disagree with
this
 idea. In
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essay
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 we will look through both sides of
this
arguments
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. Personally, handwriting should be still alive.
By
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 development of the technology, everything is reachable on the internet and
people
 can print out
the
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every
resources
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resource
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 from there, so
this
make
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 their life easier.
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,
prints
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the prints
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 that
internet
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the internet
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 provides are
like
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so
artifical
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artificial
, they don't give feelings
such
 as passion, intense, sadness and more.
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,
while
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when
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people
writing
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write
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 something by hand, they put their emotions to
the
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apply
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paper and express
to
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them to
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 the readers.
In
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other
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the other
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 hand,
human
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humans
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is
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a social
being
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beings
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 and capable
to adapt
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of adapting
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 to the
enviorment
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environment
.
Due to
the
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this
 feature, by stopping
teach
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teaching
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 handwriting to the
childs
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children
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, they won't be able to write something
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with
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 their hands in the future.
As a result
 of that, in some
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 they won't express themselves.
Otherwise
, as mentioned before,
people
 keep saying the advantages of digital writing but there is no
neccesarity
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necessity
 to stop teaching handwriting because of these causes. In my opinion, I prefer to
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use
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 handwriting than digital writing but we should use
ease
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the ease
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 that technology offers.
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task achievement
Make sure each paragraph has a clear central idea and supporting evidence. The argument for handwriting conveying emotions is interesting but not sufficiently supported with examples or evidence.
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The essay presents ideas clearly; however, they could benefit from more detailed explanations to fully address the question. For instance, expand on how handwriting can affect communication styles and personal expression.
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Consider providing specific examples or studies that illustrate the benefits of handwriting (e.g., developmental advantages for children, personal stories).
coherence cohesion
Improve cohesion by using linking words and transitional phrases to connect ideas within and between paragraphs. This will help the essay flow better and improve readability.
coherence cohesion
Ensure the essay clearly answers the question throughout, maintaining focus on the central theme of whether handwriting should be taught in schools.
coherence cohesion
The essay begins with a clear introduction that presents the topic and outlines the plan to discuss both sides of the argument.
coherence cohesion
There is a concise conclusion that summarizes the author's stance on handwriting versus digital writing.
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The essay attempts to balance both sides of the argument, showing an understanding of multiple perspectives on the issue.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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