Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology can replace their functions. Do you agree or disagree?
Public concern has arisen about whether public
libraries
are now a waste of money since computers have come a long way and can replace their functions. I tend to partly disagree with Use synonyms
this
statement for several reasons.
To start with, the atmosphere in a library is irreplaceable. Not only is it forbidden to make any loud noises there, Linking Words
people
know that when they get to the place everyone there will be focused on either reading, learning or spending some time in peace. Having that in mind, when people are surrounded by other Correct word choice
but people
like minded
ones, they feel like they are in a workplace. Add a hyphen
like-minded
In addition
, the books surrounding them make great decorations and stimulate a working mindset. Linking Words
For example
, when a student comes back home from lectures he or she is surrounded by a lot of lures Linking Words
that
means that the student will most probably spend at least two hours on his phone or computer doing unnecessary scrolling or gaming. Correct pronoun usage
which
Whereas
the one that goes to the library is bound to get a lot of work done without any major problems.
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In contrast
, some others may claim that it is way easier to find all the information that they need on computers. Linking Words
That is
indeed trueLinking Words
,
because only Remove the comma
apply
by
writing something down on the browser provides you with various sources and answers on the topic, Change preposition
apply
however
not everything online is free to access, Linking Words
Linking Words
that
is why Correct pronoun usage
which
libraries
are irreplaceable. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, spending as much time looking at a computer screen and not at books is unhealthy, your eyes start hurting, the blood pressure rises and you get headaches. A lot of people have experienced these problems and they can get worse Linking Words
overtime
resulting in needing to get glasses or having migraines for the rest of your life. That would never happen from looking at pages from a book. Correct your spelling
over time
Moreover
, not only are Linking Words
libraries
a healthier option they are Use synonyms
also
relaxing and calming. Staying in a quiet, peaceful place is mandatory for everyone Linking Words
everyday
to get peace of mind and relax after the day.
Having considered both views, I think that Replace the word
every day
libraries
are essential to everyone and should not be replaced in the near future. Computers have definitely come a long way but the technologies still have some improvement to do in order to be able to replace Use synonyms
libraries
.Use synonyms
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task achievement
Strengthen your argument by addressing the opposing view more comprehensively and integrating it smoothly into your essay.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea and each sentence links logically to the next to enhance coherence.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction and conclusion clearly state your position, providing a strong framework for your argument.
task achievement
You provided relevant examples that effectively support your points, particularly about the health impacts of screen time compared to reading books.
Word Count
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A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.