Some people believe that there will be a reduction in air travel in the future. Do you think that this trand is a positive or negative development.
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The number
people
think that in future there will be a decline in air
travel
. This
has some advantages such
as clean ecosystems, and people
’s health will be better, however
it has some disadvantages Add a comma
however,
such
as exploring other planets and cosmos
. In Correct article usage
the cosmos
this
essay
I will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of Add a comma
essay,
this
development
Firstly
, it is common
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a common
the common
view
that a reduction in Add the particle
to view
air
travel
will lead to decrease
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a decrease
the decrease
of
carbon emissions levelChange preposition
in
,
since Remove the comma
apply
airplanes
make a lot of carbon footprint in our ecosystem that detrimentally Change the spelling
aeroplanes
damage
it. As an example, plenty of planes need natural gas, which is when mining has Correct subject-verb agreement
damages
negative
effect on Add an article
a negative
environment
. Add an article
the environment
Furthermore
, radiation from air
vehicles also
affects people
’s health, when they are flying people
get more level
of radiation. Fix the agreement mistake
levels
Thus
, air
travel
has a lot of downsides, which will be solved if government officials embrace it seriously.
However
, it has some drawbacks that will influence our exploration of cosmos
. Because it will Correct article usage
the cosmos
effect
on speed of exploration. Correct your spelling
affect
For example
, people
fly to explore the cosmos and planets a lot of times, which have
an impact on Correct subject-verb agreement
has
level
of exploration. Scientists in these explorations will find a replacement for the earth. Add an article
the level
However
, it is not a hundred percent
that they will do it, Change the spelling
per cent
therefore
we do not rely on it.
In conclusion, Replace the word
reducing
reduction
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reducing
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in air
air
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in air
travel
will affect beneficially for people
and Correct article usage
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environmentCorrect article usage
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,
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beneficially, nevertheless
nevertheless
drawbacks such
as Correct article usage
a slowdown
slowdown
of exploitation here too. In my opinion, the benefits of Correct article usage
a slowdown
reduction
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reducing
air
travel
will outweigh the disadvantages of this
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task achievement
Try to provide more specific examples and evidence to support your points. This will help in making your arguments more persuasive and clear.
task achievement
Ensure that your key points are elaborated sufficiently with explanations. Avoid just stating the point; delve into why it is an advantage or disadvantage.
coherence cohesion
Improve the logical structure by ensuring that each paragraph has a clear main idea, supported by examples and explanations.
coherence cohesion
Try to use more linking words and phrases to ensure smooth transitions between your ideas and paragraphs.
task achievement
You have provided both positive and negative aspects, showing an attempt to discuss the topic from multiple angles.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes an introduction and a conclusion, which helps frame your response.
coherence cohesion
Your intention to discuss advantages and disadvantages is clear from the beginning, which helps guide the reader through your essay.