People who decide on a career path early in their lives and keep to it are more likely to have a satisfying working life than those who change jobs frequently.To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.
It is believed that choosing what you want to do early in
life
and sticking to it is one of the key
Change to a plural noun
keys
for
success, and a satisfying career, compared to those who change their field frequently. Change preposition
to
This
essay totally agrees with this
statement because it allows people to focus on their goals and also
helped
them in achieving their goals early.
Wrong verb form
helps
To begin
, when someone chooses
what he or she Correct subject-verb agreement
choose
wants
to become when Correct subject-verb agreement
want
thay
are young, it allows them enough time to build their portfolio in their desired careers. Correct your spelling
they
This
results in, these young individuals being way ahead of their fellow colleagues, and as a result
, their chances of getting a better job also
increases
. Correct subject-verb agreement
increase
For instance
, a recent survey conducted by MBA students in an American university found that nowadays every company wants to higher only those candidates who have some sort of past work experience.
Moreover
, when people stick to their fields, there
chances of promotion Replace the word
their
also
becomes
greater. Correct subject-verb agreement
become
That is
because working in the same job or in the same field at different places helps them to become better in their area, and
Correct word choice
apply
thus
multiplying their chances of achieving their life
goals. This
can also
be proved by the fact that all the top level
positions in Add a hyphen
top-level
majority
of the big companies are occupied by those who are more experienced.
In conclusion, choosing a career early in Add an article
the majority
a majority
life
and sticking to it, allows a person to have more
satisfying work Add an article
a more
life
, because it provides them more time to gain valuable experience and that they can reach the top positions early.Submitted by saadanwer89 on
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