The pie charts on the left illustrate the proportion of three electricity-generating sources in the German and French markets in 2009 while the charts on the right further detail the composition of the segment of renewable energy in that same year.
the
two
pie charts on the left illustrate the amount of percentage of three different electricity
production sources in Germany
and France
, whereas
the two
pie charts on the right depict the three main compositions of renewable energy
biomass, hydroelectric, and wind in 2009.
Overall
, the most common energy
generation in Germany
was conventional thermal while
nuclear power accounted for the vast majority of electric production in France
. In terms of renewable energy
, biomass, and wind were the two
primary compositions in Germany
, whereas
in France
Hydroelectric was the main energy
.
It can be seen that, in 2009, Germany
and France
generated relatively close with 560 billion KWH and 510 billion KWH, in which conventional thermal production in Germany
made up the highest proportion at 59.6%, while
this
figure for France
just around a tenth. By contrast
, most of the electricity
in France
was produced from nuclear power with three-fourths. Whereas
renewable electricity
in both countries took up the lowest portion with 17.4 and 13.7, respectively.
Regarding natural energy
, the two
countries had a significant difference. In Germany
, electricity
generated from Biomass and Wind made up a large portion at 39.3 and 36.9, respectively. In contrast
, both of them just made under a tenth percentage out of total renewable energy
. In France
, natural resources were produced mostly from Hydroelectricity with 80,5 by far higher than any others. Finally
, solar geothermal had a negligible percentage in both countries.Submitted by kyobi46455 on
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