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The table below presents information about the Australian economy in the late 1980s. Write a report describing the trend in profits shown in the tabel

The table below presents information about the Australian economy in the late 1980s. Write a report describing the trend in profits shown in the tabel
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The table reveals the
profits
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 before tax of Australian companies in the late 1980s, split by
sectors
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. In general, the
overall
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 trend was definitely upward for the
profits
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 gained by the top three
sectors
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, with manufacturing earning the largest sum throughout the years.
In contrast
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,
profits
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 in other
sectors
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 witnessed a plunge in the final period. From 1986 to 1987, the manufacturing sector earned over $4.6
million
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. Since
then
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, the figure rose steadily by about 2, reaching the record high of over 8.6 in 1988-89, before dropping slightly to around 7.8 in 1989-1990.
Conversely
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, mining hit a low of above $3.8
million
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 in the third period
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then
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and then
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 peaked at almost $5
million
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 in the end, marking a growth of roughly $1.2
million
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 since 1986. Retail trade, though made the smallest
profits
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 in the top three, witnessed a consistent rise from over $0.6
million
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 to approximately $1.4
million
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 after 4 years. The
profits
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 of other
sectors
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 improved constantly from about $1.2
million
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 in the period of 1986 and 1987 to roughly $1.7
million
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 by 1989, when they suddenly plummeted to nearly $0.4
million
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 in 1989 and 1990

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