In many countries around the world, it is common for families to run their own business. Some people think that keeping the business within the family is the best approach while other believe this could lead to problems. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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latter
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relatives can cause problems in the relationships, if there is any loss in the project, or if
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a rift
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the sudden
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, they developed trust issues between them and eventually parted ways.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure consistent use of capital letters at the beginning of sentences.
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Provide more diverse and specific examples to enrich your arguments.
Task Achievement
Try to balance the discussion of both views. The argument about trust within family businesses is slightly underdeveloped compared to the risks outlined.
Coherence and Cohesion
You provided a clear introduction setting the context and outlining your approach.
Task Achievement
The conclusion effectively summarizes your viewpoint, reiterating key ideas and offering a personal opinion.
Task Achievement
You used a relevant personal example to illustrate the potential challenges of family businesses.
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