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The given line graph illustrates the travel to and form the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by the UK residents in the year 1999.

The given line graph illustrates the travel to and form the UK from 1979 to 1999. The bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by the UK residents in the year 1999.
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The line graph illustrates
visits
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 to and from the
UK
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 from 1979 to 1999,
while
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 the bar chart shows the five most popular countries visited by
UK
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residents
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 in 1999 which were Turkey, Greece, the USA, Spain, and France. Units are measured in millions of
people
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. Overview, the value of
visits
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 abroad by
UK
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residents
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 and
visits
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 to the
UK
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 by overseas
residents
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 increased over the period given.
However
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,
visits
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 to the
UK
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 by overseas
residents
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 were more
.
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frequent.
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 France was the most popular country visited by
UK
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residents
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,
whereas
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 Turkey was the
least
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smallest
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 nation. In terms of
visits
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 abroad by
UK
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residents
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, it stood at approximately 11
million
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people
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 in the first year after which it went up to more than 50
million
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people
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 in the
last
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 year.
Likewise
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, in the case of
visits
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 to the
UK
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 by overseas
residents
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, it started at 10
million
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people
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 in 1979 and it gradually increased reaching
the
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a
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 peak at nearly 25
million
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people
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 in 1990. With regard to the most popular countries visited by the
UK
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 in 1999, France and Spain accounted for about more than 10
million
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visitors
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 and almost 9
million
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visitors
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 respectively. In the case of the USA and Greece, they reached nearly 4
million
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visitors
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 and 3
million
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visitors
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conssequtively
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consecutively
.
On the other hand
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, when it comes to Turkey, it had the lowest number of
visitors
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 (less than 3
million
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).

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Vocabulary: Replace the words visits, uk, residents, people, million, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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