The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The above pictorial elucidates
honey
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honey
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-making process by the
bees
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. The procedure starts with
bees
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making
hives
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to store the
nectar
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and
then
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ends with the extraction of
honey
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formed by natural processes from the
hives
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.
Firstly
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,
Bees
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work to make
hives
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for their colonial shelter
as well as
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honey
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storage. Once the hive is complete, they fly around in search of floral fields or fruitful trees.
Bees
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can fly long distances in search of
Nectar
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.
Nectar
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is the floral extract
that is
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sucked by the
bees
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and accumulated in the bee
hives
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. So
bees
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from various directions collect
nectar
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to store it in their hive as it
also
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serves as their food during hibernation. In the next step,
bees
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flap their wings creating a buzz sound to increase the temperature of the closed hive.
This
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action helps floral
nectar
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to evaporate excess water and
hence
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increasing heat inside gradually turns
nectar
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into
honey
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.
Finally
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, when the
honey
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is fully loaded, it can be manually squeezed to extract
honey
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from the
hives
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for consumption.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words honey, bees, hives, nectar with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Metamorphosis
  • Nectar
  • Foraging
  • Pollination
  • Worker bees
  • House bees
  • Honey stomach
  • Honeycomb cells
  • Beeswax
  • Evaporation
  • Hexagon-shaped
  • Simple sugars
  • Enzymes
  • Capping
  • Preserve
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