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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the total number of
minutes
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 by telephone calls in the UK,
represents
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representing
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 three categories
such
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 as local
fixed-line
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, national and international
fixed-line
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 and mobiles between 1995-2002. The units are measured in billions.
Overall
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, national and international
fixed-line
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 and mobiles both
of
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apply
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them
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apply
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have the same drop in
minutes
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 at the beginning and a rise
at the end
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. As for, local
fixed-line
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 have unstable
from
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for
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 all years. As can be seen from the graph,
1998
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from 1998
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 to1999 local
fixed-line
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have
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had
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same
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the same
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 rate of
minutes
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 about 90
minutes
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.
However
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, the users local
fixed-line
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 in 1995
around
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was around
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 70
minutes
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,
even
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and even
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 as the years progressed in 2005, they were the same
numbers
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number
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 at 70
minutes
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.
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As well as
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Also
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, in 1995 people who
use
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used
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 national and international
fixed-line
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 decreased
at
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by
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 nearly 35
minutes
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.
While
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,
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apply
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 in 2002 increased
minutes
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 to 65.
Moreover
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, in 1995 people
unfavorable
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unfavourable
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 use mobiles (all calls) they
was
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were
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 just 5
minutes
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 compared in 2002 they went up to 45
minutes
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, fixed-line with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommunications
  • landline
  • mobile phones
  • local calls
  • national and international calls
  • billion
  • minutes
  • growth
  • decrease
  • trend
  • fluctuate
  • overtake
  • peak
  • plummet
  • steady
  • significant
  • minor
  • chart
  • period
  • comparison
  • category
  • data
  • illustrate
  • reveal
  • indicate
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