The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart gives information about the
number
of people
participate
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participating
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in five
activities
at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia,
such
as film
club
, martial arts, and amateur dramatics, in
participants
, over a 21-year period from 2000 to 2020. It can clearly be seen that the
number
of film
club
participants
was always the highest in all
activities
.
Moreover
, the
number
of table tennis
club
members saw the biggest over
this
period.
Firstly
, in 2000, the
number
of
participants
in
musical
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the musical
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performances
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performance
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field was the lowest among those
activities
with 0
member
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members
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. At that time, table tennis’s
member
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members
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had 16 people, and the
number
of martial arts
club
member
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members
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was over two-fold
it
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apply
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, at 35 people.
In addition
, there was
a
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the
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same
number
of
participants
between two
activities
which were amateur dramatics and table tennis,
was
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which was
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20 members in 2010.
Finally
,
although
the quantity of musical
performances’
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performances
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member
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members
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was the lowest figure during
16-year
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the 16-year
a 16-year
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period from 2000 to 2015, it increased and overcame the
number
of amateur dramatics
participants
in 2020,
were
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which were
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18 and 5
participants
respectively.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, activities, club, participants, member with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rates
  • trends
  • significant increases/decreases
  • stable numbers
  • fluctuations
  • overall participation
  • comparison
  • activities
  • social centre
  • Melbourne
  • participants
  • highlight
  • report
  • graph illustrates/demonstrates
  • 20-year period
  • key features
  • main features
  • statistical data
  • variations
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