The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart gives information about the
number
of people participate
in five Wrong verb form
participating
activities
at a social centre in Melbourne, Australia, such
as film club
, martial arts, and amateur dramatics, in participants
, over a 21-year period from 2000 to 2020.
It can clearly be seen that the number
of film club
participants
was always the highest in all activities
. Moreover
, the number
of table tennis club
members saw the biggest over this
period.
Firstly
, in 2000, the number
of participants
in musical
Correct article usage
the musical
performances
field was the lowest among those Change the noun form
performance
activities
with 0 member
. At that time, table tennis’s Change to a plural noun
members
member
had 16 people, and the Fix the agreement mistake
members
number
of martial arts club
member
was over two-foldFix the agreement mistake
members
it
, at 35 people. Correct pronoun usage
apply
In addition
, there was a
same Correct article usage
the
number
of participants
between two activities
which were amateur dramatics and table tennis, was
20 members in 2010.
Correct pronoun usage
which was
Finally
, although
the quantity of musical performances’
Change noun form
performances
member
was the lowest figure during Fix the agreement mistake
members
16-year
period from 2000 to 2015, it increased and overcame the Add an article
the 16-year
a 16-year
number
of amateur dramatics participants
in 2020, were
18 and 5 Correct pronoun usage
which were
participants
respectively.Submitted by chauhongngoc.577 on
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, activities, club, participants, member with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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