Task 1. The pie charts compare the highest level of education achieved by women in Someland across two years, 1945 and 1995. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the two graphs below.

Task 1. The pie charts compare the highest level of education achieved by women in Someland across two years, 1945 and 1995. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the two graphs below.
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The diagrams indicate the female’s achievement in
levels
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of
education
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in Someland between 1945 and 1995.
Overall
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, most of the numbers and information changed significantly in two
years
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. The first pie chart describes six
levels
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of
education
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and each level
divides
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unequally.
Secondly
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, the
number
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of
education
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levels
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decreased from six to four, three
levels
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had no exit in 1995. As can be seen,
women
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's
education
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level in Someland in 1945 was terrible, there was no post-graduate and only 1% of people had their first university degree. The
number
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of
women
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who graduate high school is only 4% and 10%, 15% with who study until 9th and 6th grade, respectively.
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, no schooling and third grade were common in 1945 with 35% for each level.
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,
education
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for
women
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in 1995 was more developed than in 1945. The situations of no schooling, and studying until 3rd and 6th grades had completely disappeared.
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, the
number
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of females who have first university degrees dramatically rose from 1% to 50% in 50
years
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.
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, post-graduate increased sharply to 20%, and the
number
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of
women
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who studied until 12th grade
also
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grew to 20%.
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, girls who studied for 9
years
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remained stable
during
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for
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50
years
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words levels, education, years, number, women with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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