The line graph indicated the information about the number of questionnaires collected from Tourist Information office in a city based on individual, letter/email and telephone by first 6 months in 2011.

The line graph indicated the information about the number of questionnaires collected from Tourist Information office in a city based on individual, letter/email and telephone by first 6 months in 2011.
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the line chart compares the information about the
number
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of
questionnaires
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received from
traveler's
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traveller's
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administration in a city by person, by letter/email, and by calling from January to June 2011.
overall
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, the
number
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of
questionnaires
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collected from individuals started at a low point but saw a significant increase over six months.
In contrast
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, the figure for letters or emails declined gradually in
this
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recorded period. In the first month, the
number
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of face-to-face
questionnaires
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obtained the lowest figures just over 400.
However
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,
this
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figure rose significantly constantly and overtook the letter and email via at the mid of February.
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people called the tourist office hit bottom at 800 in February before having a slight growth to 1000 in March. Turning to the other future, the
number
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of
questionnaires
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sent by individuals went up continuously and became the most popular method in the rest of the period from the middle of March. After remaining unchanged from March to April, the
questionnaires
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submitted by telephone surged to become the second rank at around 1600 in June.
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, the letter and email methods decreased by nearly half in the period from around 800 to under 400.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, questionnaires with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Questionnaire
  • Tourist Information Office
  • Individual submission
  • Letter/email communication
  • Telephone survey
  • Fluctuation
  • Stable trend
  • Gradual increase
  • Varied patterns
  • Surpassed
  • Significant rise
  • Seasonal peak
  • Tourist behavior
  • Information campaign
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