The line graph indicated the information about the number of questionnaires collected from Tourist Information office in a city based on individual, letter/email and telephone by first 6 months in 2011.
the line chart compares the information about the
number
of Use synonyms
questionnaires
received from Use synonyms
traveler's
administration in a city by person, by letter/email, and by calling from January to June 2011.
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traveller's
overall
, the Linking Words
number
of Use synonyms
questionnaires
collected from individuals started at a low point but saw a significant increase over six months. Use synonyms
In contrast
, the figure for letters or emails declined gradually in Linking Words
this
recorded period.
In the first month, the Linking Words
number
of face-to-face Use synonyms
questionnaires
obtained the lowest figures just over 400. Use synonyms
However
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this
figure rose significantly constantly and overtook the letter and email via at the mid of February. Linking Words
While
people called the tourist office hit bottom at 800 in February before having a slight growth to 1000 in March.
Turning to the other future, the Linking Words
number
of Use synonyms
questionnaires
sent by individuals went up continuously and became the most popular method in the rest of the period from the middle of March. After remaining unchanged from March to April, the Use synonyms
questionnaires
submitted by telephone surged to become the second rank at around 1600 in June. Use synonyms
Finally
, the letter and email methods decreased by nearly half in the period from around 800 to under 400.Linking Words
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