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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of world illiteracy in several countries by gender for the
last
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 year.
First,
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there are six regions. The lowest percentage is developed countries, which was near zero per cent for both genders; the highest is South
Asia
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, with 55% for females and 35% for males. The Latin American has a similar
rate
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 for
men
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, 10%,
while
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women
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 are approximately 12%. Meanwhile, East
Asia
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 has a higher
rate
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 of lack of literacy in females by 20%.
Second,
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African
women
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 who can't read or write have elevated rates compared to
men
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, by 58% for
women
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 and 31% for
men
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.
In addition
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, the Arab States have the same
rate
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 as Africa for each sex.
To conclude
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, the world illiteracy
rate
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 by gender is displayed for six different regions. South
Asia
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 has the highest
rate
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, with 35% of
men
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 and 55% of
women
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 being illiterate. East
Asia
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 has a 20% female literacy
rate
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,
while
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 Latin America has a comparable
rate
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 of 10%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words asia, rate, men, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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