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The line graph shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.Describe the information shown in the graph.

The line graph shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000.Describe the information shown in the graph.
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The line chart illustrates the different
number
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 and kinds of fast food spend by Australian youth between 1975 and 2000.
Overall
, it is can
seen
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 that
,
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at the beginning of
period
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the period
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humbergers
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hamburgers
 were
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the
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 peak level .
However
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 the least
commne
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common
 was Pizza. First of all, in 1975 , Fish and
chip
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chips
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were
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reached to peak it was 100 per annum .
Then
 it dropped
in
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 the end of 1975
then
 it recovered
rose
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and rose
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 in 1980 . After
that
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 the figure
of
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 fish and
chip
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chips
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 plummeted sharply until
end
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the end
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 of the period. In 1975, Pizza and hamburgers were a gradual rise in general trend .
Although
 the number of Pizza were remained unchanged between 1995 to 200o to reach above 80 per
years
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year
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.
Likewise
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 the hamburgers
were
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hit an all-time high
at the end
 of
period
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 to
accounted
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 for around 100 per annum.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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