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Studies have shown that in many countries the income gap between the rich and poor is ever increasing. What problems can arise from this situation and what could be done to address this situation?

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There is no denying the fact that the
income
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gap
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 between the high and low classes has been heightened in several nations, which has been mentioned by research.
This
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 essay will discuss the implications of
this
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 issue and propose possible solutions to tackle it.
To begin
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 with, there are numerous effects
can
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that can
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 be caused as
result
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a result
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 of increasing the
income
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 differences among wealthy and
imoverished
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impoverished
people
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.
Firstly
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, declining in
a
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the
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precentage
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percentage
 of educated
individuals
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 among poor families could be a result of
this
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 issue, contributing to limiting the job opportunities of these
people
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.
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, poor
people
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 will accept the lower salaries jobs as they do not have adequate
qualification
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qualifications
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 to find a suitable job position, as it has
caused
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been caused
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 by the high cost of higher education that
prevent
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prevents
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 low-class
individuals
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 from
complete
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completing
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 their
study
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studies
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.
Additionally
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,
crimes rate
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crime rates
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 may be increased among low-
income
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people
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such
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rubbing
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by rubbing
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.
This
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 could be in order to meet their
lives’
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lives
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 necessities.
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,
United
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the United
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 States government in 2022 reported the increasing of
cirmes
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crimes
crime
 among poor
people
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as a result
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 of the difficult
econmical
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economical
economic
 situation that these
people
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 have suffered from it. In terms of solutions, adequate financial support from government institutions is essential, because it could help
in boosting
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boost
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 the financial situation of poor
people
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 and
reducing
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reduce
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 the
income
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gap
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 between them and
rich
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the rich
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 once. It is
also
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 possible to say that government
aids
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aid
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,
such
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 as loans, may
contributes
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contribute
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in
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to
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 enhancing low-
income
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individuals
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 to start their own
business
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businesses
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 and flourish
their
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in their
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econmic
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economic
 state.
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 could contribute
in fill
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to filling
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this
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gap
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.
Moreover
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,
cancel
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cancelling
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 the
univeristy
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university
 fees might induce
low-economic
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low-income
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people
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 to continue their studies, which allow them to access
higher-wages
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higher-wage
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 work positions, and shrink the
income
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gap
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 between rich and poor
individuals
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.
For example
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,
Singphore
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Singapore
 has developed and reduced the economic
gap
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 among different
income
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 classes by educating its
people
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. In conclusion, there are multiple reasons behind
differences
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the differences
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of
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in
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income
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the income
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gap
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among
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between
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 poor and rich
people
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. It is
also
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 true that
opitions
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options
 to mitigate
this
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gap
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 are available.
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