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The graph below gives information about household car ownership in Britain from 1990 - 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The graph below gives information about household car ownership in Britain from 1990 - 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The line chart illustrates key data about the ratio of car owners in England between 1990 and 2015. The units are measured in percentage.
Overall
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, it is clear from the diagram that from 1990 to 2005 both households
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with one-car
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one-car
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one car
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 and two or more cars fluctuated until reached the highest and the lowest point respectively.
In addition
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, the rate of people doesn't have a car dropped dramatically
all
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apply
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over the period.
Whereas
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, the proportion of more than one car owner increased.
According to
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 what is shown, from 1990 to 2005 both households
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with one-car
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one-car
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one car
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 and two or more cars fluctuated until reached more than half and just below 10% respectively.
Then
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 the second one increased by more than a quarter. Unlike the first one decreased until reached the same ratio. In terms of no-car started as the highest point at the beginning.
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 it decreased by 20% of his proportion at the middle of the period .After ten years it kept his rate .
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, it reached 15% .

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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