Argument: Some people think that students in single-sex schools perform better academically. Others, however, believe that mixed schools provide children with better social skills for adult life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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I think single-
sex
school
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schools
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will produce better
students
academically.
First,
because that kind of
school
provide
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a better environment for
students
to study.
Students
can be more
concentrate
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on their
study
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studies
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rather than distracted
from
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opposite
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sex
attraction.
This
is very important
especially
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in their teenage years
such
as in high
school
. Teenagers on their 15-17 years experience a constant hormone influx.
Therefore
it is normal
to begin
to pay attention to
their
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opposite
sex
. In a single-
sex
school
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school,
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it will not be an issue since there
is
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are
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no
opposite
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opposite-sex
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sex
students
for one to
attracted
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to. Eventually, they will pay more attention to their books.
Second,
it is very important
to
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teenager to develop their characters in
teenage
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their teenage
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years. In a single-
sex
school
, a student can focus
to enhance
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their abilities without any insecurities to find approval from their peers. I
have
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those
experience
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experiences
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when I studied in a
girl-high
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school
. I was totally freely being
my self
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myself
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. I did not have to face
problem
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problems
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such
as
try
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to look beautiful
everyday
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in order to attract some boys. I can play football without judgement that that kind of sport is only for boys. I
was
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also
become
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student
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chairwoman and
proof
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my qualities without any cultural firewall
such
as
perception
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the perception
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that only boys could be
a
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leader
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.
At
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the
end
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a student in a
single
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single-sex
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sex
school
have
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has
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the
opportunities
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to fulfil his or herself before he or she
step
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in to
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a more
real life
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environment in
universities
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university
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. They are very well prepared in
academically
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sense and
also
in their character to adapt in their adult life. Well, academic life is not only whether you are smart or not but it is more about adaptation.
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task achievement
Make sure to provide a balanced discussion by addressing both views in the prompt. You primarily focused on the advantages of single-sex schools; consider discussing the benefits of mixed schools as well.
task achievement
Ensure that your argument for single-sex schools and how they prepare students for adult life is comprehensive and clearly articulated.
coherence cohesion
Use smooth transitions between your ideas and paragraphs to improve the logical flow of your essay.
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Your personal experience added a valuable and relevant example, giving your argument authenticity and personal insight.
task achievement
The essay contains clear main points concerning the advantages of single-sex schools with specific examples.
coherence cohesion
The points are generally well organized, with a logical progression of ideas related to your main argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender-specific education
  • co-educational system
  • academic performance
  • learning environment
  • social integration
  • mutual respect
  • peer interaction
  • gender dynamics
  • educational outcomes
  • distractions
  • communication skills
  • curriculum adaptation
  • learning styles
  • real-world interactions
  • social development
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