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Band 3

In the future, nobody wiil buy printed newspapers because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#future #nobody #wiil #newspapers
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Nowadays, There are
aguement
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argument
arguments
 that no one would purchase traditional newspapers because readers can read
news
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the news
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by
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through
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 online access. I strongly disagree with
this
 viewpoint.
To begin
 with, Online publishing is more
eco - friendly
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eco-friendly
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 than hard
copied published
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copy publishing
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 because online publishing
no
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 need to use paper from trees in
production
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the production
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 process.
Thus
, trees in paper production would be reduced.
In addition
, decreasing in paper usage could
reduced
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reduce
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expenses
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the expenses
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 of printed publishing.
Moreover
, people can read electronics published anywhere and anytime. In order that they have
electronics
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electronic
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 devices and internet. A good example of
this
 is reading news through social media
such
 as Facebook, X and
Instragram
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Instagram
.
As a result
, Readers could access
to
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apply
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news or
others
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other
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 content which is their
interested
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interest
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more
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to more
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comfortable
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comfortably
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 than printed
out
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apply
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published.
To conclude
, I believe that in the future, people will read online published because is more
eco - friendly
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eco-friendly
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 and easy to access than traditional published.
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task achievement
Consider expanding on why some people may continue to prefer printed newspapers, providing a balanced view.
task achievement
Ensure that each main idea is developed fully with specific examples to enhance argument clarity.
coherence cohesion
Improve coherence by using a greater variety of linking words to connect ideas smoothly.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion that effectively address the prompt.
coherence cohesion
Ideas are well-organized into clear paragraphs with relevant supporting details.
task achievement
There is a clear stand taken against the statement with reasons given for the disagreement.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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