It is usually thought that every person should put
aside for their
, including young
. I agree with
statement but I
believe that excessive
saving could lead to unhappiness.
saving can lead to economic independence for an individual but
for its descendants. The benefits of
extend from buying consumer goods to
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health issues.
,
by saving
could buy a house or a car that would fulfill their basic needs and
make their life, and possibly their kids' life, more comfortable.
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young
because they have more time to save
and build a sustainable
.
, they could
use their savings when a critical situation comes, like
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surgery, where
would be urgently needed.
“First of all, saving
can have many benefits for
, regardless of their age. Specifically, when
saves
, they can afford things that
wouldn’t be possible for them.
he could buy a house or a car that would make his
life more comfortable.
, he could
use his savings in a critical situation where
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would be urgently needed like
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surgery.
, saving
, especially from a younger age, would certainly help
to be economically independent and
it could
benefit his kids or relatives.”
there is a risk of excessive
saving which can lead individuals to antisocial behaviours and eventually unhappiness, regardless of their age.
to say, many
are only focused on how they can save as much
as possible and they stop having any interest in caring about other
’s lives.
nowadays, It is very common for
to keep saving more and more
, but they never or very rarely use
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, making the whole
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process an end in itself and at the same time don’t have any free time or energy left.
, I agree that saving
is indeed important for everyone
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since
could help them build a more sustainable
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and
for their kids.
,
must be aware that excessive
saving could potentially drain all of their energy, leaving them distant from others and eventually unhappy.