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You have a neighbor who is often burning rubbish at their house. Write a complaint about it to the local council and say – What is happening? – How is your family harmed by that? – What could be the solution, in your opinion?

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Dear Madam/Sir in City Council Hereby I would like to report a
complain
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 regarding my
neighbour
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neighbour's
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 activities. Almost
everyday
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every day
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, he goes to his backyard and
burn
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burns
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 his rubbish. I acknowledge that he has the
rights
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right
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 to do whatever he wants in his backyard.
However
, the smoke comes to our house all the time
due to
 the wind. It is very inconvenient since I have two toddlers and my 70 years old mother stays in our house once in
while
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. My youngest son - 3 years old
have
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cough
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a cough
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 whenever any smoke
come
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comes
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 to his room window on the second floor. We went to
doctor
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the doctor
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 and he said, children always have some sensitivity toward smoke especially before 7 years old. My mother, who comes to our house over the weekend, has to wear
mask
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a mask
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 for hours after our next door
burn
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burns
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 their
trashes
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trash
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. Unfortunately, her eyes could not be covered.
Therefore
, she has red eyes almost every time she visits us. I have tried to communicate
this
 matter to our neighbour. Unfortunately, after 2-3 days off,
then
 they repeated the action over and over again. I have talked to other neighbours yet they restraint
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me to
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to convey
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from conveying
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a
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an
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 official
complain
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complaint
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. I hope the City Council
could
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can
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 do something about
this
. Especially
there
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since there
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 is already
garbage
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a garbage
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 disposal system in our area. There are some garbage boxes provided by the city for people to take their garbage away every morning. I argue
this
 is a win-win solution for all. Thank you for your consideration. Yours Sincerely Yune
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task achievement
To enhance task achievement, ensure all parts of your complaint are fully developed and provide a detailed background on previous actions taken, like discussing with the neighbor and other community members.
coherence cohesion
For improved coherence, consider using clearer transitional phrases and sentences to connect ideas smoothly.
task achievement
The complaint clearly states what is happening with the neighbor burning rubbish and provides specific examples of its effects on the family.
coherence cohesion
The essay provides a logical structure with a clear introduction and conclusion, making it easy to follow.
supporting main points
Specific examples, such as the impact on family health and attempts at resolution with the neighbor, are well-articulated, supporting the main points.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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