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The shows changes in sea levels over time, with estimates for the past and projections for the future.

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The graph illustrates key information about estimated
sea
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level
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changes
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 between 1800 and 2100, which is demonstrated between past and future. The units are treasured in (
mm
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, it is clear from the graph that there are significant
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 during the period provided, there is an increase of 500
mm
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 in 2100 Compared to 1800.
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, the
sea
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level
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 changed between the years 1900 and 2000, it increased gradually to about 10mm,
whereas
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 in 1800 and 1850 it remained
steadily
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 int was below zero
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.
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 what is shown, there is a sharp rise in
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level
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 charges it is evident between 2000 and 2100. A significant increase can be observed in
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level
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 in the year between 2050 and 2100 predicted to become about 200mm to 500mm. From an
overall
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, comparison between 1800 and 2100, there are several
changes
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 in the
sea
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level
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 between estimates of the past and the projection of the future.
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Overall, it is clear from the graph that there are significant changes during the period.
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The essay attempts to cover the period and mention significant data points.

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