Deforestation caused by human activity is happening in many parts of the words, with serious results for the environment. What do you think can be done to solve this problem? Support your opinion with reason and examples from your own knowledge and experience?
Deforestation
have
been a topic of discussion for Change the verb form
has
long
time because it is caused by human activity .Some find it relevant that it Change the article
a long
also
can cause pollution
. I believe that it does ,
because having forests around and plants can help with limiting Remove the comma
apply
Pollution
and ozone
layer and Correct article usage
the ozone
to
actually protect it. A lot of scientists and Change preposition
apply
researches
have brought and Correct your spelling
researchers
showed
a plan on how to solve Wrong verb form
shown
this
they suggest to stop
Change the verb form
stopping
deforestation
and to
actually start and to convince civilians to plant and water any Change preposition
apply
plant
or trees Fix the agreement mistake
plants
near by
, they suggested it would help them understand the importance of having clean air and to reduce Correct your spelling
nearby
pollution
. For
example
the Amazon forest with the climate changes and human enforcement it have reduced the quality of air making , Add a comma
example,
it
Correct word choice
and it
have
been a challenge to be there. I have seen that a lot of places in Change the verb form
has
world
where Add an article
the world
deforestation
have
been done ,Correct subject-verb agreement
has
it
have Correct pronoun usage
apply
became
abandoned placesChange the form of the verb
become
Add the comma(s)
,
became
isolated and turned Change the form of the verb
become
to
Change preposition
into
a research areas
. In Correct the article-noun agreement
research areas
a research area
conclusion
I think that Add a comma
conclusion,
deforestation
is the reason why pollution
is happening thousands of years ago when humans were not as active as in
now , Change preposition
apply
pollution
was hardly seen.Submitted by dr.hessahaljalahma on
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task achievement
Your essay generally addresses the task, but it could be more comprehensive in exploring multiple solutions to deforestation beyond just planting trees.
coherence cohesion
Work on creating a more organized structure with clear paragraphs for introduction, body, and conclusion to improve coherence.
task achievement
Enhance the support of your main points with specific and varied examples that showcase your knowledge and experience.
task achievement
You provide an example of the Amazon forest, which demonstrates awareness of real-world issues.
task achievement
You've clearly expressed the connection between deforestation and pollution, showing a good understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
The essay concludes with a clear opinion, summarizing your viewpoint effectively.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite