Deforestation caused by human activity is happening in many parts of the words, with serious results for the environment. What do you think can be done to solve this problem? Support your opinion with reason and examples from your own knowledge and experience?

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Deforestation
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been a topic of discussion for
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time because it is caused by human activity .Some find it relevant that it
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can cause
pollution
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because having forests around and plants can help with limiting
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layer and
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actually protect it. A lot of scientists and
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have brought and
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a plan on how to solve
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deforestation
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actually start and to convince civilians to plant and water any
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or trees
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, they suggested it would help them understand the importance of having clean air and to reduce
pollution
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the Amazon forest with the climate changes and human enforcement it have reduced the quality of air making ,
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been a challenge to be there. I have seen that a lot of places in
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where
deforestation
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been done ,
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have
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abandoned places
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especially by animals because when there is no stable environment to survive . Those places have
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isolated and turned
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a research areas
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. In
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I think that
deforestation
is the reason why
pollution
is happening thousands of years ago when humans were not as active as
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now ,
pollution
was hardly seen.
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task achievement
Your essay generally addresses the task, but it could be more comprehensive in exploring multiple solutions to deforestation beyond just planting trees.
coherence cohesion
Work on creating a more organized structure with clear paragraphs for introduction, body, and conclusion to improve coherence.
task achievement
Enhance the support of your main points with specific and varied examples that showcase your knowledge and experience.
task achievement
You provide an example of the Amazon forest, which demonstrates awareness of real-world issues.
task achievement
You've clearly expressed the connection between deforestation and pollution, showing a good understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
The essay concludes with a clear opinion, summarizing your viewpoint effectively.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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