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Some people prefer to be during exam days and go through the entire syllabus in the last few days, whereas others have regular habits, studying a little every day. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both studying patterns and choose which one is a better way of action according to you

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Education
play
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 a vital role in every stage of life. A group of people
doing
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studies
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few
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a few
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 days before the exams
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, others have a habit of
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study
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. Both have their own pros and cons which I will discuss in
this
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 option.
To begin
 with,
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 regularly is very crucial as it gives
learner
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learners
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 more
time
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 range of knowledge in detail. To elaborate
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,
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 a single topic a day
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more
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them more
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time
 to
person
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also
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enough
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them enough
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time
 to get some extra knowledge related to that topic which eventually help them in
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 future
however
,
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this
study
take
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 a large amount of
time
 in a day and in the end leads to spare less
time
 for other curricular activities which
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 the physical health.
On the other hand
, those individuals
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likes
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 to
study
 near exams are more proactive in
overall
 things like, they develop
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physical and mental growth blankly
as well as
also
 develop a great personality by performing tasks.
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,
person
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people
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 who spend
time
 outside in
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 activities Know how to deal with people and
situation
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situations
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 which is not tech by any textbook
whereas
, during a short
time
 of learning they only know about important things which
make
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 them less confident and
effect
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 their exam scores in long run and make them weak in studies. In Conclusion,
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 believe education is important but other skills
also
 help a
person
 to grow up in their life and deal with daunting tasks of corporate deals so if a
person
 daily
give
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time
 to
study
's they heed to compromise with other skills that may be not helpful in future.
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Coherence & Cohesion
Improve organization by clearly distinguishing between advantages and disadvantages of each study method.
Coherence & Cohesion
Clarify and support main points with clear examples or evidence to strengthen arguments.
Task Achievement
Focus on expanding ideas and presenting comprehensive arguments for both study patterns.
Task Achievement
Ensure that the essay fully details advantages and disadvantages separately and clearly, for stronger comparisons.
Task Achievement
The essay correctly identifies and discusses the two main study patterns, providing a framework for analysis.
Coherence & Cohesion
An introduction and conclusion are present, providing necessary structure for the essay.

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