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The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015.

The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015.
The bar chart provides key information about the females’ proportion who continued their studies in universities in five countries from 1980 to 2015.
Overall
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, the graph clearly shows that the Australian
women
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 percentage did not change over the years.
In addition
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, the proportion of French females witnessed a slight increase,
whereas
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 the UK, the USA, South Korea, and France saw a significant change in the rate of
women
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 who went to university from 1980 to 2015.
According to
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 what is shown, in 1980, the percentage of Australian
women
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 school-leavers who went to higher education was over half,
while
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 in both the United Kingdom and America it was more than a third.
Furthermore
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, half of French females entered college, and less than a fifth of South Korean
women
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 did. In terms of 2015, the rate of Australian females who pursued their studies in university remained constant, and in France, it slightly rose by approximately 5%.
Conversely
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, the percentage of the UK and the United States noticeably increased to reach over 50%, and South Korea experienced rise of roughly 15%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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