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The diagram describes the production of canned fruits. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram describes the production of canned fruits. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the processing of
production
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the production
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 of canned
fruits
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.
Overall
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it is clear that
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 there are 14 distinct stages in
this
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 process, beginning with the picking
apples
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of apples
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 from the trees and ending
of
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with
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the
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apply
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parking them
to
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at
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 the supermarket. The first stage in the production of
the
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apply
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canned
fruits
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, apples, are picked by workers from the trees.
Then
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fruits
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 are transported to
factory
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the factory
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. After choosing.
fruits
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 are recorded
the
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as the
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 weight respectively.
At the end
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 of the
part
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part,
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 apples are washed cleaning and
are
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apply
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put into
refrigerator
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the refrigerator
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 for storage
in
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at
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the
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a
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 low temperature. After a period of time,
fries
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the fries
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 are divided into small patches that have been peeled.
These debris
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This debris
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are
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is
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 put into the water or juice, which can extend the time of storage.
Then
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, the
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fruits
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fruit
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 bottles are sealed by cooking or sterilizing. After heating, they are placed for a long time, which can reduce their temperature.
Finally
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, these
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fruits
Fix the agreement mistake
fruit
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 cans are packed and
sending
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sent
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 to the supermarket.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fruits with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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