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The best way to make the road transport of goods safer is to ask drivers to take a driving test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

#road #transport #goods #drivers #test #year
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As a safe practice,every individual
heavy loaded
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vehicle
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drivers
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driver
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have
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 to
given
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 a driving
test
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in
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apply
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every
year
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. Nowadays, every nation follows strict rules and regulations to keep their
town
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 safe and
traffic free
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 movement inside the very populated
town
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 areas. I fully support
this
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 statement that the transport department has to make an arrangement for individual driver tests which are driving a heavy loaded goods
vehicle
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 inside the city and national highways which will be elaborated on in the following paragraph.
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, many
town
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 roads are full of heavily loaded vehicles with trucks and trailers,
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, all industrial area roads are
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 full of the movement of heavy goods trucks, hydra, and cranes and some of
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them
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 park on the
road
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 for many days that's why it creates the
issue
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 of
road
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 traffic and
road
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 blockages to enter the another
vehicle
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.
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, some heavily loaded goods transport vehicles are driven over speed and
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 drunk drive which is why there may be an increased chance of
road
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 accident and death ration on national highways. If the heavy transport
vehicle
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 department has to make a strict rule that every individual driver has to
issue
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 a new driving license
on
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apply
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every
year
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 after clearing the driving
test
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 at the nearest nominated location and
issue
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 the driving license so there may be a solution to reduce the traffic inside the
town
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 and industrial areas and serious
road
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 accident ratio.
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in
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all Gulf countries like Dubai and Qatar
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make
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 a strict rule for every driver to
issue
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 a new driving licence every
year
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 after successfully
completion
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completing
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 the driving
test
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. In conclusion, its
Government
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Government's
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responsibilities
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responsibility
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to
issuing
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issue
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te
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the
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 driving
licences
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licence
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 each and every
year
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 after finishing their driving
test
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 to make a safe and traffic-free nation and to reduce
the
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apply
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road
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 blockages and
road
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 accidents in
town
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 areas.
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