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In many parts of the world there are now more multi-generational households e.g. where grandparents live with parents and children, than in the past What do you think are the reasons for this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for you answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience

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Silvia. I am a doctor. I'm from Milan. I went to Venice. It's cloudy. I
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 to take part in the languages club as I need to improve my listening and speaking skills in
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 very well as I don't have a lot of predisposition for that. I would like to learn French because the sound of
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 is very musical .
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, I really believe that France is one of the most beautiful cities in the world. Posting videos of the members taking part in the
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Try to expand more on your main ideas and provide detailed responses. For instance, explain more about why you believe multi-generational households are becoming more common and how this is beneficial or problematic.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion. This will help give your essay a structured feel.
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Support your arguments with specific examples or evidence to strengthen your points.
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Your attempt to express why you find learning languages important is clear and relatable.
coherence cohesion
You bring a personal perspective on language learning, which adds depth to your essay.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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