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You have received a bill from a mobile phone (or cell phone) company for international call charges relating to a time when you did not use your phone for international calls. Write a letter to the company, complaining about this giving your reasons asking for the bill to be changed Begin your letter ‘Dear --------’ Do not write any addresses Write at least 150 words

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Dear Sir, I hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that
i
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recieved
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received
 a bill from you with the international charges
in
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at
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 that time when
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 don't even use it.
However
, on
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the bill
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bill
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its
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showing
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 the charges of 120 dollars which is two
time
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of
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my regular bill.
Moreover
, I never use international calling from my sim you guys can even check my history
i
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 never use
this
. I don't know anyone outside
from
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 my home country so why should
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 call
internation
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international
 calling
.
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Furthermore
,
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totaly
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totally
 unfair that your company charged my card 120
dollar
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 which
i
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 didn't even
used
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.
Due to
which
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this
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 my card goes to
negative
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a negative
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 balance and now
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 have to extra fee to my bank for
overdrafting
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over drafting
 the account. I hope you guys understand my
situtation
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situation
 and please charge me only for my regular plan.
In addition
, Refund my balance amount to my account as soon as possible. Your's faithfully
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coherence cohesion
Improve logical structure by ensuring clear separation between reasons for the complaint and the request for bill change.
task achievement
Include specific details such as the billing date or account number for a more complete response.
coherence cohesion
The letter includes a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
task achievement
The tone is polite and formal, suitable for a letter to a company.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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