New technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Nowadays with
rapid
advancement of Add an article
the rapid
technology
we are facing Add a comma
technology,
with
a significant change in shopping and retailing. I absolutely agree with Change preposition
apply
this
mindset and in this
essay, I will explain my idea.
Technology can make our life
much Fix the agreement mistake
lives
more
easier and the main reason Change the word
apply
of
Change preposition
for
that is
existence
of social media and Add an article
the existence
website
. Fix the agreement mistake
websites
individual
can just search their need on platforms like Replace the word
Individuals
google
and find the relative website and order it. On the other Capitalize word
Google
side
sellers can create a website and put their products on there Add a comma
side,
instead
of renting a place and pay
so much money. Wrong verb form
paying
For instance
, amazon
is one of the biggest and most favourable Capitalize word
Amazon
application
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applications
of
these days, it covers all Change preposition
apply
the
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apply
peoples
Change noun form
people's
need
and Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
it
is so Correct pronoun usage
apply
user friendly
.
Buying from online shops can Add a hyphen
user-friendly
also
has
another benefit too, people now can compare products very easily. Change the verb form
have
However
now we have Add a comma
However,
that
option on websites to create Correct determiner usage
the
an
card to compare Change the article
a
products
details Change the noun form
product
such
as price and features.Moreover
for the Add a comma
Moreover,
seller
Add a comma
seller,
this
place is much easier ,
because they can find the other Remove the comma
apply
price
and their Fix the agreement mistake
prices
competitive
very easily and they can know how Replace the word
competition
can
they will manage that.
In conclusion, I believe that the changes that technology made us Remove a modal verb
apply
is
significantly great and we have time to spend Correct subject-verb agreement
are
other
things Change preposition
on other
however
nothing can replace the feeing
and the sense of going to the stores in person.Correct your spelling
feeling
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Make sure to clearly structure your paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on a single main point to enhance readability.
content development
Expand on the reasons why you agree with the opinion and explore the implications of these technological changes more comprehensively.
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introduction
The introduction clearly states your position and outlines what the essay will discuss.
content
You effectively highlight the impact of technology on shopping and retailing, which addresses the essay question directly.
conclusion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your main points and provides a personal perspective, making a nice wrap-up of the essay.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.