The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the amount of people who visited to UK for
holiday
, business purposes and to visit friends or relatives in the period of 20 years.
Fix the agreement mistake
holidays
Overall
, the number of vacationers who came to the UK to visit friends and relatives steadily increases
Wrong verb form
increased
while
people who visits
for holiday Wrong verb form
visited
trip
and business fluctuated wildly.
Tourist who spends time with family and friends started the period with approximately 3.5 Fix the agreement mistake
trips
million
and this
consistently moved up in value year
on year
to reach a peak of around 7 million
in 2004, before plummeting to just above 6 million
by the end of the surveyed
period.
People who went Replace the word
survey
for
holiday began the recorded Change preposition
on
year
with an amount of roughly 6.1 million
and rises
to reach the maximum Wrong verb form
rose
visitors
of around 9.1 Correct quantifier usage
number of visitors
million
before decreasing and finally
reaching to
nearly 9 Change preposition
apply
million
travelers
. Change the spelling
travellers
Whereas
for work related
visitors was valued at just below 6 Add a hyphen
work-related
million
and declined for the next 3 years with about 4 million
before rising significantly to reach 8 million
and subsequently
fell in the year
2009.Submitted by anakin999
on
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words million, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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