The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to the UK for different purposes between 1989 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors who came to the UK for

different purposes between 1989 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting

and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the amount of people who visited to UK for
holiday
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, business purposes and to visit friends or relatives in the period of 20 years.
Overall
, the number of vacationers who came to the UK to visit friends and relatives steadily
increases
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increased
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while
people who
visits
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visited
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for holiday
trip
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trips
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and business fluctuated wildly. Tourist who spends time with family and friends started the period with approximately 3.5
million
and
this
consistently moved up in value
year
on
year
to reach a peak of around 7
million
in 2004, before plummeting to just above 6
million
by the end of the
surveyed
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period. People who went
for
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holiday began the recorded
year
with an amount of roughly 6.1
million
and
rises
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to reach the maximum
visitors
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number of visitors
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of around 9.1
million
before decreasing and
finally
reaching
to
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nearly 9
million
travelers
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.
Whereas
for
work related
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visitors was valued at just below 6
million
and declined for the next 3 years with about 4
million
before rising significantly to reach 8
million
and
subsequently
fell in the
year
2009.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words million, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • overseas visitors
  • trend
  • fluctuations
  • statistics
  • year-on-year comparison
  • peak periods
  • holidaymakers
  • business trips
  • educational tourism
  • significant increase/decrease
  • data interpretation
  • exponential growth
  • steady decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cultural events
  • tourist influx
  • graph analysis
  • quantitative change
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