The chart below shows the results of three surveys on absenteeism in a particular European country in the years of 2000, 2005 and 2010. The results show the reasons people gave for not going to work

The chart below shows the results of three surveys on absenteeism in a particular European country in the years of 2000, 2005 and 2010. The results show the reasons people gave for not going to work
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The chart compares information about the results of surveys on absenteeism in a special European country in 2000, 2005 and 2010 years.
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chart's consequences show cause for not going to work.
Overall
, among all nations, the vital problem which is caused by not going to work is an illness.
Furthermore
, one of the second huge problems among people is their family responsibilities. In several European countries in 2000 most employees suffered from
this
kind of illness, 45%. But in the next years after
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five years in 2005,
this
percentage decreased to 40%.
Also
in 2010, 35% of
public
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had difficulties with their health
for
this
reason they had more issues with absenteeism.
Moreover
, there are some
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who had problems with stress in 2000 fewer people had
this
kind of issue, at almost 6%. In 2005
this
consequence was almost unchanged, at 5%.
However
, in 2010
this
result increased among all workers, at approximately 15%.
Besides
that, they have personal needs
such
as appointments in 2000 15% of worker could not go to work because of their personal needs with personal perforces. In 2010 20% of employees suffered from that. Among the European countries, the second biggest problem is
community's
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responsibilities to their families.
Therefore
, 29% of employees could not go to their workplace in 2000 and in 2005 approximately 23% of
community
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faced some type of difficulties.
Furthermore
, in 2000 society faced unexpected situations,
such
as transport and weather, at 10%. In 2005
this
outcome was enhanced to 16%. In 2010
this
rate was not unmodified
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