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The map below shows a school in 1985 and the school now.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows a school in 1985 and the school now.Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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, there is a clear plan
as
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to construct more
of
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the
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apply
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Use synonyms
classrooms building
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classroom buildings
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 and facilities
such
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 as
pool
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a pool
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 and fitness center
as
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apply
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to accommodate the
number of
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apply
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growing student
populations
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population
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 and develop
skills
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the skills
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 required nowadays. In 1985, the playing fields occupied a large area behind the school building;
however
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,
this
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 recreational space has been reduced to about half to accommodate other building premises
such
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 as the
classrooms
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, pool and fitness
center
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centre
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 at the moment. The
classrooms
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 building was now upgraded to 2
structure
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structures
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 to replace the old one property
classrooms
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. The classroom block behind the car park
were
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was
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 expanded to 3 storeys from its original 2 storeys in 1985. The library was demolished and replaced in
favor
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favour
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 of the learning resource centre
as well as
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 one computer room. The parking lot and the
classrooms
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 which were
initially
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 on the left of the library were knocked down, leaving the space unoccupied by any new construction. No modifications have been made to the entrance and exit,
additionally
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, the roads circling the carpark and extending to the playing fields have now been removed to pave for new buildings.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words classrooms with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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