The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about energy consumption in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2030.

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about energy consumption in the USA since 1980, with projections until 2030.
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The line graph illustrates the amount of seven kinds of
energies
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energy
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(petrol and oil, coal, natural gas, nuclear, solar/wind,and
hydropower
) in the USA which were consumed over 50 years from 1980 to 2030. Units are measured in
quadrillion
.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that all the energy
start
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starts
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out in different quantities and the consumption of all the energies showed
and
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an
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upward trend and they are expected to increase over the period given except
hydropower
is
decreas
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decrease
decreased
. At the start of the period, petrol and oil is the most popular fuel
while
hydropower
is less
fuel consuming
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fuel-consuming
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. With regards to the amount of petrol and oil used, it began at around 35
quadrillion
and
then
peaked at 50 in 2030.
Likewise
, approximately 20
quadrillion
of natural gas was consumed in the first year after which the figure fluctuated slightly and is expected to
culminated
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at 25
quadrillion
in the
last
year.
Similarly
, the consumption of coal at the beginning was 15 before it rapidly
touch
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the highest point at nearly 30 in the final year.
On the other hand
, the consumption of nuclear, solar/wind and
hydropower
started
with
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one point which is at around 3
quadrillion
in 1980 after that unclear and wind /solar go up
however
,
hydropower
is expected
touch
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the lowest point in 2030 at almost 1
quadrillion
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hydropower, quadrillion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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