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The charts below show the growth in the population in some of the world’s largest cities over three time periods. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the growth in the population in some of the world’s largest cities over three time periods. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided bar graph illustrates the
growth
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rate
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 in the population in
Tokyo
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, New
York
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, Shanghai, Bombay, and Jakarta in 1970, 1990, and 2010.
Overall
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, the percentage
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rate
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 for 2010 is the highest for all cities.
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, the lowest one is 1970.
Also
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,
Tokyo
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 is the city with the highest
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rate
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 in the timeframe.
Tokyo
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, New
York
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, Shanghai, Bombay, and Jakarta clearly have the highest
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 rates across all years, ranking
first,
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second,
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third,
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fourth, and fifth, respectively.
Furthermore
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, all cities experienced an increase in
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 rates over the given timeframe. It is evident that Bombay's population has grown significantly over the past few years.
Conversely
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, the population of New
York
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 experienced a slight increase.
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, the highest
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rate
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 was nearly 27 per cent for
Tokyo
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 in 2010. Jakarta experienced the lowest
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rate
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 of approximately 2 per cent in 1970.
Subsequently
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, the
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 rates of New
York
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 and Shanghai demonstrated approximately the same level in 1970 and 1990.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words growth, rate, tokyo, york with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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