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The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the peercentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.

The chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The table shows the peercentage change in each category of exports in 2016 compared with 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparision where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates export incomes for five product groups during 2015 and 2016.
Table
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The table
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also
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 shows information about changes in
percent
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per cent
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 for each category over
one-year
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a one-year
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 period.
Overall
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, what stands out is that petroleum products were the most valuable source
for
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of
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export's
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export
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 income.
On the contrary
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, textiles were the least exported
merchendices
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merchandise
merchandises
. Interestingly, textiles exportage had the most notable growth over the year.
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,
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apply
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 gems and jewellery
were
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experienced a considerable fall between 2015 and 2016. In
details
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detail
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,
oil related
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oil-related
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 materials were sold for the most in these years by roughly over 60
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billions
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billion
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 $. Following them technological products had the second place
of
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on
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 the list by just below 60
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billions
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billion
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 $ in 2015. Meanwhile,
jewelleries
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jewellery
pieces of jewellery
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 and
foods
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food
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were bought by other countries by approximately 40 and 30
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billions
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billion
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.
Lastly
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, fabricated
manfacturings
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manufacturing
 were sent out of the country for the least by well over 20
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billions
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billion
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 in 2015. Regarding changes, all the products experienced
rise
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a rise
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 in
saling
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sales
 except jewelleries. The most
dramatical
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 change was seen in textiles by more than 15% and
peacked
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peaked
packed
over
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at over
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 30
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billions
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billion
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. Engineers
works
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work
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' sales
also
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 plunged by 8.5% and became the second
considrable
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considerable
 increase of the year.
In contrast
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 to others, jewellers' business dropped by more than 5% in the same year
however
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 it stayed
over
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at over
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 40
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billions
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billion
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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