The charts below show the average precentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much

The charts below show the average precentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much
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The three pie charts illustrate the proportion of three types of nutrients (
sodium
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, saturated fat, and
sugar
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) in four typical meals consumed in the
USA
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(breakfast, lunch, dinner, and snacks)
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, Most of the citizens in the
USA
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consume
Sodium
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and fat in the evening,
while
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they add more
sugar
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to their snacks.
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, three of all the least consumption in the mornings. From the pie clear that the majority of people in the
USA
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have an unhealthy habit. The proportion of
sodium
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had the highest at dinner time
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for 43%, followed the saturated fat
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at around
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37%, and
sugar
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around
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23%. From the bar, it shows the majority of the
USA
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citizens consumed
sugar
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as a snack around 42%,
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less of people consumed
sodium
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(14%) and fat (21%) as snacks. In terms of breakfast, many people in the
USA
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not having unhealthy breakfasts. All of them accounted
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% of fat and
sugar
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,
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sodium
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was around 14%. There are, both
sodium
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and saturated fat had little difference in consumed as lunch around 29% by
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, 26% by saturated fat, and around 19% for consumed
sugar
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, sugar, usa with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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