In the past, people ate local food in season, but nowadays, people can buy a variety of food from all over the world. Do the advantages of this development outweigh it disadvantages?

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Nowadays, individuals can pay
different
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for different
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food
from various countries. So they do not depend on their local productions that grew in a particular season. In my opinion, I think there are many positive points for being
food
from outside.
On the other
hand
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there are some negative sides. In
this
essay, I will
represent
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advantages
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the advantages
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and disadvantages of buying
food
from other nations.
To begin
with, importing
food
from different places become very common these days. It has many advantages.
Firstly
, communities can taste different
type
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types
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of
food
. Some of them could not
grew
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in their country.
Secondly
, bringing
food
from outside
country
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the country
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can
effect
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affect
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on
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apply
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the economy of the nation but citizens can not wait for the
seasons
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season
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to
ate
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eat
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their
favorite
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favourite
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food
.
For instance
,
banana
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bananas
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only grow in the autumn in Oman so they buy
it
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them
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from different
other
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apply
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countries until the next autumn.
Thirdly
, exchange the
food
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of food
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between countries will encourage
the
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international trade.
In contrast
, there are some people
like
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who like
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to
ate
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eat
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a
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apply
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local
food
because of many reasons.
Firstly
,
an international
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international food
a portion of international food
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food
is
expensive
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more expensive
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than local
food
. So
the
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they
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prefer to
ate
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eat
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their own
food
.
In addition
, they are not fresh and they could harm the health.
Moreover
, technology
make
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the
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apply
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agriculture
more
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easier so they can plant and produce any kind of
food
like green
house
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greenhouse
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.
To sum up
, everything
have
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bad and good sides. Individuals should use
a
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apply
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useful productions for them.
Also
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encourage their local
food
and try new
food
from various places.
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