The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for the different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for the different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph provides information on the number of
participants
for the different activities at one social centre in Melbourne Australia
in
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from
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2000 until 2020. In general, film club become the activity with the highest
participants
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number of participants
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,
whereas
other activities
shows
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show
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a
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apply
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various numbers.
Film
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The film
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club
become
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has
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the highest
participants
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number of participants
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ever since 2000. It started with around 65
people
and remained constant until 2020. Following in
the
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apply
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second place is martial arts with over 35 applicants in 2000 and
plunctuated
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punctuated
fluctuated
throughout the years before it
reach
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reached
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around the same numbers in 2020. On
one
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the one
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hand,
tabble
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table
tennis shows a
signicant
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significant
increase
for
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the
participants
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number of participants
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over the years. Starting with less than 20
people
in 2000 the number
then
slowly
rise
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rose
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to 20 and
stablilised
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stabilised
stabilise
before it soared until reaching a
peaks
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peak
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of over 50
people
in 2020.
Similarly
, the number of applicants for the musical
perfomances
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performances
increase
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increased
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rapidly from 2005 until
reach
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reaching
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over 17
people
in 2020.
In contrast
,
participants
for the amateur dramatics
shows
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showed
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a decrease
with
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to
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over 25
people
in 2000 and
remain
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remained
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stable before it plummeted to less than 10
people
in 2020.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words participants, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rates
  • trends
  • significant increases/decreases
  • stable numbers
  • fluctuations
  • overall participation
  • comparison
  • activities
  • social centre
  • Melbourne
  • participants
  • highlight
  • report
  • graph illustrates/demonstrates
  • 20-year period
  • key features
  • main features
  • statistical data
  • variations
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